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Today we lay to rest
One of the very best
A car, nay, a friend
Who was with me 'til the very end
Of the fall semester of senior year.

There was nary a car with a trunk
That could hold copious amounts of junk
Or steering that could turn on a dime
At least 30 percent of the time
You will be missed.

From your wide set eyes
To thighs that held no lies
With a pleather interior which absorbed the heat
And was sure to burn those who took a seat
Well, that may not be as missed.

You got me from point A to point B
Even when I wanted to go to point Z
With such a style that was all your own
You traveled across many time zones
And as such your clock was often wrong.

Short trips to NHS, OD, and VU
And long trips to LA, IL, and NYC too
You never complained when I pushed you too far
And far surpassed any sports car
Except for not having working interior lights, a broken gas gauge, a radio antenna that didn't retract, a small engine, tiny tires, belts that often came loose, etc.

You survived harsh winters and brutal summers
Despite that being kind of a bummer
You carried friends and enemies alike
But never could quite fit my bike
I figured you were just jealous.

So today you've reached your final destination
And I hope this has been a proper exaltation
Though you went by many names
Olds, T-Bone, Cutters, it's all the same
My friend and faithful partner, you will never be forgotten.

Thank you for your service.
:iconayame-kenoshi:
On December 15, 2010, my car went to be in the big parking garage in the sky. This was written in his memory.

He was a '96 Oldsmobile which I named Cutters. He was my first car handed down from my brother who received it from our Aunt and Uncle. Though he wasn't the sleekest looking car and definitely had his odd ways about him, he was very dependable and really better than I could ever ask for.

The idea for this took many manifestations, but I'm pleased with the end result. On the bus ride home from the car dealership where he was towed, a flood of memories came pouring back to me. I originally wanted to write a short story, but that's when I thought a cheesy poem would be more appropriate.

This poem's not supposed to be good or rhyme perfectly, because my car wasn't about perfection or looking good. Cutters did his job, which was to transport me safely from one place to another, without fanfare or splendor.

I realize this is more extravagant than what should be done when your car dies, but it's meant to be silly and over-the-top. ;P
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:iconanthony-aggro:
The cars of our lives. There should be a soap around them. This is a great homage to your old ride.
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:iconayame-kenoshi:
They really are. :nod: Thank you! :hug:
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^3wyl Dec 19, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Aww...

I can never feel the same as what some people do, but... it's quite endearing, this. I like how it feels humorous, and yet there's emotion there as well, lurking behind it and all.

Great phrasing and structure to it. I like the way it flows and how it's pretty continuous, as if to emphasise that it'll be wish you forever, regardless of everything else. :nod:
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:iconayame-kenoshi:
Thank you so much! I'm glad you felt that way! :D
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`TimberClipse Dec 18, 2010  Professional Filmographer
It may or may not rhyme 'perfectly' but you did a great job! I have written some poems before and rhyming is really very hard.

Great work Toby :hug:

TC
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